King Arthur Drabble: "What Has Been and is Not"

[amari_z]

Title: What has been and is not
Challenge: For ka100 challenge #18 "Winter," take 2
Word Count: 100
Warnings: None, except maybe implied spoilers for the end of the movie.
Notes: Takes place a few weeks before the movie.
Title from George Eliot ("Perhaps the wind/ Wails so in winter for the summers dead,/ And all sad sounds are nature’s funeral cries/ For what has been and is not.")



Lancelot’s eyes barely flickered from Arthur’s shadowy form when Tristan unexpectedly settled beside him. The others were huddled together across the campsite, but Arthur sat alone. In past winters he had always shared Lancelot’s cloak.

“It’s his choice.”

Lancelot scowled, but leaned into Tristan’s warmth. “The fool will freeze. What does he think I’ll do? I can’t fight that God of his.”

“It’s not you he fears.” A pause. “This early snowfall—winter’s not yet come.”

But Lancelot didn’t hear that warning. By summer they’d be home; he was wondering if Sarmatia’s sun could be as warm as he remembered.

Comments

[sasha-b.livejournal.com]

Ah, stupid, stupid man.

And lovely. :))))

[amari-z.livejournal.com]

lol, which one? they're both quite stupid here. ; )

This tiny fic drove me insane for some reason (I know, I know, short trip)--I think I was trying to say a few too many things. Even now, after many versions, it came out cryptic, I think, but oh well. I'm done. : )

[sasha-b.livejournal.com]

I was thinking of Arthur, but good point. :p

I've almost got the latest chapter of Hedonism done. Yay!

Yeah, I get you when things bug you to get out - and sometimes you want to tell so much more than you can in the space, but it only works for a drabble. But I thought it was very well done.

[amari-z.livejournal.com]

Yeah, me too mainly, but I didn't want to come off, you know, as picking on him (me? no way).

ohhh almost done with Hedonism--tonight?! Let me know if you want a quick beta--I should be awake enough for about 45 minutes or so. If not, go ahead and post it, girl!

[sasha-b.livejournal.com]

Nah, it's fine. I'm happy with the way it's going...I may not end up posting it til tomorrow, but we'll see.

You, pick on Arthur? Whaaaaat? *wink*

[dea-liberty.livejournal.com]

Makes you just want to knock their heads together, doesn't it? Wonderful work :D

[amari-z.livejournal.com]

Ah, but when don't we? ; ) Thanks!

[just-jimbo.livejournal.com]

Interesting. The thing that strikes me most here is the way you draw the scene. I can see it and feel it, even though I'm not sure what Tristan's getting at, and I'm intrigued but a little surprised by Lancelot's reverie.

You are saying a lot, and I think it could be turned into different things for different people, which I've learned is what constitutes really good writing.

[amari-z.livejournal.com]

Or bad, I guess. ; )

It is a bit (or maybe a lot) cryptic. I spent a long time fiddling with it--but I think I might have gotten in what I was trying for. I'm not sure how it reads to others, though, so I'm glad to hear that you thought it was interesting.

Thanks for you comments!

[just-jimbo.livejournal.com]

Never bad in your case...

[amari-z.livejournal.com]

Ah, you're so nice! : )

But since smiley faces don't always convey the sentiment properly--let me just say that I appreciate very much the time you take to give feedback--I always look forward to reading your comments. : )

[ex-koisunset365.livejournal.com]

Sometimes cryptic makes it linger in one's mind longer. And that's good.

[amari-z.livejournal.com]

You know, I could have sworn I replied--maybe LJ ate it. Any way, thanks for reading. If it lingers in your mind, you have my apologies. ; )

[far-mountain.livejournal.com]

I find the relationship between Lancelot and Tristran an especially intriguing one. I liked seeing them featured together in this one. I especially liked Lancelot leaning into Tristran's warmth.

It is striking that while Arthur sat alone so did Lancelot, until Tristran came along.

It's fun to muse about what's going on in the scene.

Nice one, Amari.

[amari-z.livejournal.com]

I’m glad you enjoyed!

Some of this was inspired by the scene in the woods where both Lancelot and Arthur seem to settle down well away from the others (and each other).

I’m enjoying Tristan. He’s a bit of a cipher to me, but he does seem to have things to say. : )

Thanks for your comments!