King Arthur Drabble: "Winter Where You Are"

[amari_z]

Title: Winter Where You Are
Challenge: For ka100 challenge #18 "Winter"
Word Count: 100
Warnings: None, except spoilers for the end of the movie


When summer comes again to Britain, Arthur, newly crowned, cannot shake winter’s chill. Although he sweats in his armor, although the sun beats down upon him, still, he shivers.

He does dream sometimes of warmth—of snow pale skin, the touch of which is nevertheless fire. He wakes colder than before.

The last true heat he remembers is Lancelot’s pyre; the last true heat he felt was when he plunged his hands into those hot ashes. But no fire can warm him now. His summer has passed, and however long he lives, for him, the seasons will never turn again.

Comments

[mcee.livejournal.com]

NGAH. i really really really love this one. beautifully crafted. kuddos.

[amari-z.livejournal.com]

So pleased you liked it! Thanks much for letting me know. : )

[sasha-b.livejournal.com]

Oh GODS! And you say I'm cruel????

*cries*

Meh poor babies. *sniff* Well done, darlin.

[amari-z.livejournal.com]

Not cruel, evil. There's a differnce. ; )

Thanks and glad you liked!

[sasha-b.livejournal.com]

I see that you've managed to not fall asleep at your desk. *snort*

[amari-z.livejournal.com]

Ha! Only because I haven't really been working with any great effort (and have been consuming copious quantities of coffee)--but actually I wrote this last night, so I'm not really as delinquent as I look.

[sasha-b.livejournal.com]

LOL oh really.

Don't feel bad...all I've been doing today is thinking about finishing Hedonism up tonight and totally not wanting to help customers. Fuck 'em. :p

[amari-z.livejournal.com]

Oh, I don't feel bad. They've bled me dry here many times before and will do so again. I've no qualms about enjoying the down time.

And customers--well they should really just learn to help themselves, shouldn't they? (and aren't people just tired of shopping at this point? I'm tired and I don't even celebrate x-mas)

[sasha-b.livejournal.com]

Oh girl we've been soooooooooo busy today it's not even funny. There's nothing left to sell! Sheesh. :p

[far-mountain.livejournal.com]

Nice juxtaposition of summer and winter, hot and cold, a world of the senses and of emptiness.

My favorite line:
"The last true heat he remembers is Lancelot’s pyre; the last true heat he felt was when he plunged his hands into those hot ashes."

Nice!


Side note: I don't know if it's just my end, but I found your story through my flist. I didn't see it posted in KA100. Missing link somewhere? Slow upload to the community?

[amari-z.livejournal.com]

Glad you liked! Thanks so much.

Yes, you're right. It isn't up at the community. I will post it there later from home--for some reason it hasn't wanted to post properly from here at work. (yes, I'm slacking off today)

[far-mountain.livejournal.com]

Ah, so.

Yes, I see it there now.

I wish I was that creative when I slack. Usually I'm dusting or doing some filing.

[amari-z.livejournal.com]

Lol, I will do anything, anything to avoid dusting!

[darklyscarlett.livejournal.com]

His summer has passed... This is bloody brilliant. Good job. It would've worked even if you had stopped at that part. **snickers** Just had to throw in the ellipses!

[amari-z.livejournal.com]

Thanks, glad you liked!

You and Ashley both, tormenting me with the ellipses! It burns! : )

[just-jimbo.livejournal.com]

His summer has passed, and however long he lives, for him, the seasons will never turn again.

You're a beautiful writer. I know I've said this over and over, but this is another sign of it.

And I agree that Arthur's 'summer' has passed. The seasons are often used as signs of age, and Arthur has now entered the autumn of his life when he has to shed so much of the past and start to harvest the fruits of his labor.

Good work.

[amari-z.livejournal.com]

Wow, I'm so totally flattered. Thanks as always for your very generous feedback. I hesitate to say this because it sounds so shameless--but I will anyway ; )--if you're interested, feel free to check out my ka fic tag at my journal. There are a number fic not written for ka100. : )

Thanks again,
amari

[mistressmarilyn.livejournal.com]

Poor, sad Arthur. You write him so well!

[amari-z.livejournal.com]

Thanks so much! : )

[dea-liberty.livejournal.com]

This is really lovely. I love the way you've used the contrast between heat and cold and just...it's brilliant. Thanks for posting! :)

[amari-z.livejournal.com]

Glad you liked it!